never posted a poem on here before... kinda nervous cuz i know my poetry isnt too great!!! but yea this poems about my boyfriend/ex boyfriend/whatever ya wanna call him.... and well if ya cant figure out what its about well he bascally just leads me on, makes me fall for him, then lets me down again, its a vicious cycle but i cant let go of him for some reason .... ughhh true story... well here it is....
Untitled (in less anyone can give me a suggestion)
blood is red
red is love
as it pulsates through out my heart
you bring me up
you bring me down
you end it before i get a chance to start
you feed me emotions
pure and warm
but i need some sort of release
im a caged bird inside
i need to fly
but you hold me down on this short leash
tears well up
my minds gone nuts
why do you get pleasure from these games
bloody wrists
i need your kiss
as the only antidote for my pain
i get high off of "i love you's"
so high i lose my sight
open my eyes
only to realize
that im still just a bird inside your cage
yup thats it...... feel free to give any critisizm, i really wanna be able to improve my poetry writing skills, thanks!
My Poem... :-/
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I think it was GREAT! BRAVO!! I liked it!!
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the title can be called Red Everything
<span style=\'font-family:Times\'Something told the wild geese
It was tine to go
Through the fields lay golden
Something wispered- "SNOW"
Leaves were green and stirring
Berries,luster-glossed
But beneath the warm feathers
Something cautioned- "FROST"
All the sagging orchards
Steamed With amber spice
But each wild breast stiffened
At rembered ice
Something told the wild geese
It was time to fly-
Summer sun was on their wings
Winter in their cry
It was tine to go
Through the fields lay golden
Something wispered- "SNOW"
Leaves were green and stirring
Berries,luster-glossed
But beneath the warm feathers
Something cautioned- "FROST"
All the sagging orchards
Steamed With amber spice
But each wild breast stiffened
At rembered ice
Something told the wild geese
It was time to fly-
Summer sun was on their wings
Winter in their cry
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Re: My Poem... :-/
good idea, thanks! you guys are too sweet, thanks for readin!Originally posted by sky@Feb 5 2003, 05:46 PM
the title can be called Red Everything
"IN SPITE OF EVERYTHING, I STILL BELIEVE THAT PEOPLE TRULEY ARE GOOD AT HEART" - Anne Frank[/b]