this is my first post in Self Expression, so please don't hate me for writing such a crappy poem. I'm not sure you can even call it that. I'll probably never post here again, I was just feeling this way so I wrote a "poem"
The wall that separates me
Is as thick as tar,
And no one can see
The mask that I wear everyday,
Which is eating me away
And the tears I bleed inside
Will not stop to overflow
I scream a silent cry
In hope of forgiveness
And my waiting will last eternal
As will the hurt inside
it's crap i know... sorry
Just A Stupid Poem
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Re: Just A Stupid Poem
Its not stupid! I think its good, you really gotta work on thinking postitive
I like this part the best, its easy to relate to!
Good Job though!
I like this part the best, its easy to relate to!
And no one can see
The mask that I wear everyday,
Which is eating me away
Good Job though!
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Re: Just A Stupid Poem
yeah the same part dark angel07 likes is the part i like the best too. great job. and dont be so hard on yourself. i hate my early poetry, but i love the stuff i write now...well most of it. lol
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"It's not enough.
I need more.
Nothing seems to satisfy.
I don't want it.
I just need it.
To feel, to breathe, to know I'm alive."
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Doodle takes Dad's scissors to her skin
And when she does relief comes setting in
While she hides the scars she's making underneath her pretty clothes
She sings:
Hey baby can you bleed like me?
C'mon baby can you bleed like me
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I need more.
Nothing seems to satisfy.
I don't want it.
I just need it.
To feel, to breathe, to know I'm alive."
~TOOL
Doodle takes Dad's scissors to her skin
And when she does relief comes setting in
While she hides the scars she's making underneath her pretty clothes
She sings:
Hey baby can you bleed like me?
C'mon baby can you bleed like me
~garbage
stay gold ponyboy stay gold~
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that wasnt a crappy poem. i dont think there is such a think. a poem is made up of feelings and emotions. if it makes you feel better then its a good poem. if it expresses how you feel then its a good poem.
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i think the poem's really good, and i agree that any poem that shows feelings and expressed oneself is a good poem. good job i especially like the 2nd verse, you should write more often if it helps you express your emotions
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hey,
thanks for the support everyone, eventhough I still think it's nothing compare to all the other ones I have read in the forum. (Sorry I'm just really pessimistic).
take care all,
andy
thanks for the support everyone, eventhough I still think it's nothing compare to all the other ones I have read in the forum. (Sorry I'm just really pessimistic).
take care all,
andy
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andy, sweetie, it was a beautiful poem. and don't be so hard on yourself, please? i love you just the way you are!!
"Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but in rising every time we fall." Confucius
Romans 5:8 "God demonstrates His own love toward us in that while we were yet sinners, Christ died for us."
"If you judge people, you have no time to love them." Mother Theresa
"A pessimist sees the difficulty in every opportunity; an optimist sees the opportunity in every difficulty." Sir Winston Churchill
There is no revenge so complete as forgiveness.
Romans 5:8 "God demonstrates His own love toward us in that while we were yet sinners, Christ died for us."
"If you judge people, you have no time to love them." Mother Theresa
"A pessimist sees the difficulty in every opportunity; an optimist sees the opportunity in every difficulty." Sir Winston Churchill
There is no revenge so complete as forgiveness.