You Dont Know

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You Dont Know

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Please Comment I really want to know what you people think of this...



You Dont Know



I go about my life

Pretending everythings ok

But the truth is its not



On the outside I'm

The same girl

The same girl

That laughs with her friends

The same girl that smiles

The same girl that loved living



But on the inside

I'm someone different

My laughter had turn to tears

My smile has forever faded



You think you know me

But you have no clue

Who I really am



You dont know I cry

Myself to sleep

Everynight

Wishing I could change the

Things I've done



You think I'm strong

But really I'm weak



You dont know that

Everynight before I

Fall asleep I pray to

the lord above that

He'll end this pain

And make it my last night

Here on earth



You dont know that

All I want in life is

To be loved
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Aww hun,



I like it alot...and I can relate to it alot :'(



Good job!
For hearing all my doubts so selectively and

For continuing my numbing love endlessly

For letting you decide if I indeed was desirable

For denying myself to somehow make us compatible

For blaming myself for your unhappiness

For expecting myself to be where you wanted me to be

And I'm sorry to myself

My apologies begin here before everybody else

I'm sorry to myself

For treating me worse than I would anybody else



*B a B y G i r l*
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thank you it means a lot to me that you liked it
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Good poem
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it got the message across really well. good job!
"It's not enough.

I need more.

Nothing seems to satisfy.

I don't want it.

I just need it.

To feel, to breathe, to know I'm alive."

~TOOL





Doodle takes Dad's scissors to her skin

And when she does relief comes setting in

While she hides the scars she's making underneath her pretty clothes

She sings:

Hey baby can you bleed like me?

C'mon baby can you bleed like me

~garbage



stay gold ponyboy stay gold~
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i really like it alot, and i can also relate like unreal to it
I'm a poor wayfaring stranger

While traveling thru this world of woe

Yet there's no sickness, toil, or danger

In that bright world to which I go

I'm going there to see my Father

I'm going there no more to roam

I'm only going over Jordan

I'm only going over home



I know dark clouds will hang 'round me,

I know my way is rough and steep

Yet beauteous fields lie just before me

Where God's redeemed their virgils keep

I'm going there to see my mother

She said she'd meet me when I come

I'm only going over Jordan

I'm only going over home



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Re: You Dont Know

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thanks guys glad you liked it...there's this contest going on at our school and i'm thinking about putting that in it
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