Song I Just Wrote

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Song I Just Wrote

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Here we are. Luke has yet again managed to create a masterful piece of musical crap. Feel free to rip into it hard.



You were the only one that was there,

You were the friend who always cared,

You are the one crying above my casket

Screaming ?Why oh why? You promised you wouldnt...?



Thank you Beonca,

For being by my side when no one else would ever dare,

Thank you Beonca,

For dealing with my shit when no one else seemed to care.

Thank you Be,

But soon youll never have to dare



I know I promised you,

Id never do it,

Id never ever hurt myself,

But you know what they say...

Promises are made...to be broken



Thank you Beonca,

For being by my side when no one else would ever dare,

Thank you Beonca,

For dealing with my shit when no one else seemed to care.

Thank you Be,

But soon youll never have to care.



I was there when you had Teegan,

And I was there when you had Jaden,

And Ill be there for all your children,

And Ill always be there whispering in your ear,

?Dont worry Be. I?ll always watch, over you.?



Thank you Beonca,

For being by my side when no one else would ever dare,

Thank you Beonca,

For dealing with my shit when no one else seemed to care.

Thank you Be,

But soon youll never have to cry



And soon you?ll never mourn again,

And soon you wont have to care about me,

And soon you?ll never ever, never ever, never ever...

Remember me...
Lost and alone, My soul is so torn, Never be the same.- song lyrics I wrote



"A good listener is not only popular everywhere, but after a while he gets to know something." Wilson Mizne



A darkness grows inside me in fading shades of gray

All the colors of the world are slowly sucked away

I'm sinking ever deeper to a place that's cold and black

I can't believe I've lost you and you're never coming back

-Stabbing Westward, Torn Apart
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I like it.. sounds good.. but the subject of the song is sad.
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i like it. its moving.
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you two are both nuts. That song is absolute garbage.
Lost and alone, My soul is so torn, Never be the same.- song lyrics I wrote



"A good listener is not only popular everywhere, but after a while he gets to know something." Wilson Mizne



A darkness grows inside me in fading shades of gray

All the colors of the world are slowly sucked away

I'm sinking ever deeper to a place that's cold and black

I can't believe I've lost you and you're never coming back

-Stabbing Westward, Torn Apart
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No its not.. I like a lot.. give yourself some credit.
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I never give myself credit Im not worth.
Lost and alone, My soul is so torn, Never be the same.- song lyrics I wrote



"A good listener is not only popular everywhere, but after a while he gets to know something." Wilson Mizne



A darkness grows inside me in fading shades of gray

All the colors of the world are slowly sucked away

I'm sinking ever deeper to a place that's cold and black

I can't believe I've lost you and you're never coming back

-Stabbing Westward, Torn Apart
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I agree with my Mandy Pandy, it's good sweety.
Once in a lifetime, you find the one you really love.

For now and forever, one love that never ends.

Once in a lifetime, when every star that lights the sky.

Will shine with one reason, leading your heart to the one love you find.

Just once in your life..

Once in a lifetime, you find the one you really love.

For now and forever, one love that never ends.

Just once in a lifetime...



Soda tart!!



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i like it i just wish there was a way to here the music that goes with it - none of my stuff ever sounds goodd without music - music makes everything sound better
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I have music for it in my head...Ill try and retype it later spaced out to the tune. I have an acoustic thing in mind for it. I cant read music thought so dont expect me to put it in notes :P
Lost and alone, My soul is so torn, Never be the same.- song lyrics I wrote



"A good listener is not only popular everywhere, but after a while he gets to know something." Wilson Mizne



A darkness grows inside me in fading shades of gray

All the colors of the world are slowly sucked away

I'm sinking ever deeper to a place that's cold and black

I can't believe I've lost you and you're never coming back

-Stabbing Westward, Torn Apart
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i like it Luke...it makes me sad but i like sad things. you have far more talent than I. dont bust on your self anymore!

nice job mister.
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Originally posted by morglith86@Oct 11 2004, 08:00 PM

I have music for it in my head...Ill try and retype it later spaced out to the tune. I have an acoustic thing in mind for it. I cant read music thought so dont expect me to put it in notes :P


Thats ok - i can read music - but i cant write it. i have to sing it and record it on tape and then try to match my notes to notes on a keyboard - keyboards at school have lil things that show you which note it is. it makes it easier - try getting one of your friends to put it to music if you cant (at least if your in a band or sumthing that you need it in music for) -- i still think its really good
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I dont have any friends who can do that...and I cant find a band either...its why I don btoher writing anymore...
Lost and alone, My soul is so torn, Never be the same.- song lyrics I wrote



"A good listener is not only popular everywhere, but after a while he gets to know something." Wilson Mizne



A darkness grows inside me in fading shades of gray

All the colors of the world are slowly sucked away

I'm sinking ever deeper to a place that's cold and black

I can't believe I've lost you and you're never coming back

-Stabbing Westward, Torn Apart
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i absolutely loved it hun. keep it up

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I need more.

Nothing seems to satisfy.

I don't want it.

I just need it.

To feel, to breathe, to know I'm alive."

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Doodle takes Dad's scissors to her skin

And when she does relief comes setting in

While she hides the scars she's making underneath her pretty clothes

She sings:

Hey baby can you bleed like me?

C'mon baby can you bleed like me

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