well here it goes, just making it up as i type.
The fakeness eludes me,
the growing pain,
the sharpened smile,
its mask covered in blood,
the smell of disgust,
i see the dangling earings,
gracefully brush the slender white neck,
a noose,
the hanging inside,
empty feelings,
covered up by superficial love,
perfect life,
the wholesome transperancy of her being,
transfixed on the ideal memory,
of happiness,
it left at seven,
returned for a moment,
at ten,
not that discontented dream,
laying on the floor,
surrounded by crimson,
she cradles her knees,
against her breasts,
she's losing the race,
with her slow pace,
her smile so bright,
so sweet and warm,
it fills her up inside,
where nothing exists,
her many friends surround her,
asking what went wrong,
her blank stare,
an epitome of thoughts,
her knuckles swollen as she beats the drum,
every so often her laugh echos,
and life returns,
deep in her heart,
she knows shes alone,
alone with her fears,
hopes,
dreams,
and as she reaches for the knife,
once more you hear,
an unearthly laugh.
blah it sucks, i dunno whats wrong with me lately i'm writing so much yet it's all shit, the poem up there was about me i guess, i'm not sure, i haven't even read it through yet, i don't even know if it makes sense
Alone
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lol thanks, do u ever have those times where u really cant express how ur feeling even through paper, i mean like this poem couldn't really express what i wanted to say and thats y it's shit lol
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TJ[10:13 PM]: no not really..... it's all so.... like wow..... screw steps, you took a fuckin jet pack and strapped it on yourself and rocketed your way forward (thats my big bro)
And I'm going to extremes
Tomorrow I will change
And today won't mean a thing
I'm a bitch, I'm a tease
I'm a goddess on my knees
When you hurt, when you suffer
I'm your angel undercover
I've been numb, I'm revived
Can't say I'm not alive
You know I wouldn't want it any other way
Meredith Brooks-Bitch
And I'm going to extremes
Tomorrow I will change
And today won't mean a thing
I'm a bitch, I'm a tease
I'm a goddess on my knees
When you hurt, when you suffer
I'm your angel undercover
I've been numb, I'm revived
Can't say I'm not alive
You know I wouldn't want it any other way
Meredith Brooks-Bitch
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i get that in nearly every poem i write. i always end up sounding corny and i refuse to use cliches point blank. if i hear the line 'you take my breath away' one more time i will maime that person.
I wish I were a spy.
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i love u soooo much, u take my breath away
muahahahhahahah!!!
muahahahhahahah!!!
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