My Poem... :-/

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My Poem... :-/

Post by sugarhigh543 » Mon Feb 03, 2003 9:07 pm

never posted a poem on here before... kinda nervous cuz i know my poetry isnt too great!!! but yea this poems about my boyfriend/ex boyfriend/whatever ya wanna call him.... and well if ya cant figure out what its about well he bascally just leads me on, makes me fall for him, then lets me down again, its a vicious cycle but i cant let go of him for some reason :( .... ughhh true story... well here it is....





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blood is red

red is love

as it pulsates through out my heart

you bring me up

you bring me down

you end it before i get a chance to start

you feed me emotions

pure and warm

but i need some sort of release

im a caged bird inside

i need to fly

but you hold me down on this short leash

tears well up

my minds gone nuts

why do you get pleasure from these games

bloody wrists

i need your kiss

as the only antidote for my pain

i get high off of "i love you's"

so high i lose my sight

open my eyes

only to realize

that im still just a bird inside your cage




yup thats it...... feel free to give any critisizm, i really wanna be able to improve my poetry writing skills, thanks!
"IN SPITE OF EVERYTHING, I STILL BELIEVE THAT PEOPLE TRULEY ARE GOOD AT HEART" - Anne Frank[/b]

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Re: My Poem... :-/

Post by FiZzBaW » Mon Feb 03, 2003 9:37 pm

I think it was GREAT! BRAVO!! I liked it!!



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Re: My Poem... :-/

Post by Sky » Wed Feb 05, 2003 1:46 pm

the title can be called Red Everything
<span style=\'font-family:Times\'Something told the wild geese

It was tine to go

Through the fields lay golden

Something wispered- "SNOW"

Leaves were green and stirring

Berries,luster-glossed

But beneath the warm feathers

Something cautioned- "FROST"

All the sagging orchards

Steamed With amber spice

But each wild breast stiffened

At rembered ice

Something told the wild geese

It was time to fly-

Summer sun was on their wings

Winter in their cry

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Re: My Poem... :-/

Post by sugarhigh543 » Wed Feb 05, 2003 6:50 pm

Originally posted by sky@Feb 5 2003, 05:46 PM

the title can be called Red Everything


good idea, thanks! you guys are too sweet, thanks for readin!
"IN SPITE OF EVERYTHING, I STILL BELIEVE THAT PEOPLE TRULEY ARE GOOD AT HEART" - Anne Frank[/b]

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