Dying On The Inside

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Dying On The Inside

Post by Adnama » Tue Feb 04, 2003 12:56 am

This one needs alot of work... but i'm writers blocked, so i thought i'd put it up here and see what you all think:



The body, it caries on,

Nothing wrong here,

The face would make sure,

That no one would suspect.



So simple, to fool them,

To make them believe

That every thing is fine,

No problems here.



But on the inside,

The haze of death clouds my eyes,

The shroud of darkness over the remains,

Closing in slowly, dying on the inside.



Laughing, and joking,

Having a blast, so it would seem.

No one would suspect, from the image they see,

That I?m dying, on the inside, I?m dying.



If I?d try to tell,

They?d never believe

Such a happy person,

She must want attention.



But little do they know,

The darkness clouds my eyes,

The shroud of death over the remains,

Closing in slowly, sapping away, dying on the inside.



So cautious, so careful,

That no one would see,

My life sapping away from me,

Can?t let them know, can?t let them see



That I?m dying,

So slowly, in agony,

Dying, ever dying, every day that passes,

Strength saps away, a bit more.
"It's just not the same when you're staring into a perfect golden sunset,

And thinking about how you sold your soul to send the rain away"

-Mineral "Slower"



"And the very fear that makes you want to die

Is just the same as what keeps you alive..."

-Barenaked Ladies, "War on drugs"



My blog of depressed rants: http://sendtherainaway.blogspot.com/

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Re: Dying On The Inside

Post by Mail Order » Tue Feb 04, 2003 1:07 am

That was hellah good, Adnama!!
ATTENTION: Due to finanical difficulties, the light at the end of the tunnel has been switched off.

"They turn the lights down low,

In shadows hiding from the world,

Only coming out when it gets cold.

The seas part when they hit the floor,

The voices carry on and out the door

And everything you touch turns into gold

Like the angel you are you laugh creating a lightness in my chest,

Your eyes they penetrate me,

(Never cease to amaze me)

That's when I got up and left" Like The Angel - Rise Against

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Re: Dying On The Inside

Post by Britt » Tue Feb 04, 2003 6:25 pm

hey amanda...that was killer awesome


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Re: Dying On The Inside

Post by Adnama » Tue Feb 04, 2003 10:36 pm

Thank you ^.^
"It's just not the same when you're staring into a perfect golden sunset,

And thinking about how you sold your soul to send the rain away"

-Mineral "Slower"



"And the very fear that makes you want to die

Is just the same as what keeps you alive..."

-Barenaked Ladies, "War on drugs"



My blog of depressed rants: http://sendtherainaway.blogspot.com/

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