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Alone

Post by spatulaoflove » Sat Dec 21, 2002 5:18 pm

well here it goes, just making it up as i type.



The fakeness eludes me,

the growing pain,

the sharpened smile,

its mask covered in blood,

the smell of disgust,

i see the dangling earings,

gracefully brush the slender white neck,

a noose,

the hanging inside,

empty feelings,

covered up by superficial love,

perfect life,

the wholesome transperancy of her being,

transfixed on the ideal memory,

of happiness,

it left at seven,

returned for a moment,

at ten,

not that discontented dream,

laying on the floor,

surrounded by crimson,

she cradles her knees,

against her breasts,

she's losing the race,

with her slow pace,

her smile so bright,

so sweet and warm,

it fills her up inside,

where nothing exists,

her many friends surround her,

asking what went wrong,

her blank stare,

an epitome of thoughts,

her knuckles swollen as she beats the drum,

every so often her laugh echos,

and life returns,

deep in her heart,

she knows shes alone,

alone with her fears,

hopes,

dreams,

and as she reaches for the knife,

once more you hear,

an unearthly laugh.





blah it sucks, i dunno whats wrong with me lately i'm writing so much yet it's all shit, the poem up there was about me i guess, i'm not sure, i haven't even read it through yet, i don't even know if it makes sense :(
love,

Teal, the magical lute playing elf

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Re: Alone

Post by skaterGuy15 » Sat Dec 21, 2002 6:17 pm

i reckon it's quite good for 'shit'
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Re: Alone

Post by spatulaoflove » Sun Dec 22, 2002 11:50 am

lol thanks, do u ever have those times where u really cant express how ur feeling even through paper, i mean like this poem couldn't really express what i wanted to say and thats y it's shit lol :D
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Teal, the magical lute playing elf

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Re: Alone

Post by Barbies are Evil » Sun Dec 22, 2002 12:05 pm

TJ[10:13 PM]: no not really..... it's all so.... like wow..... screw steps, you took a fuckin jet pack and strapped it on yourself and rocketed your way forward (thats my big bro)







And I'm going to extremes



Tomorrow I will change



And today won't mean a thing



I'm a bitch, I'm a tease



I'm a goddess on my knees



When you hurt, when you suffer



I'm your angel undercover



I've been numb, I'm revived



Can't say I'm not alive



You know I wouldn't want it any other way



Meredith Brooks-Bitch

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Re: Alone

Post by skaterGuy15 » Sun Dec 22, 2002 2:45 pm

i get that in nearly every poem i write. i always end up sounding corny and i refuse to use cliches point blank. if i hear the line 'you take my breath away' one more time i will maime that person.
I wish I were a spy.

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Re: Alone

Post by spatulaoflove » Sun Dec 22, 2002 3:01 pm

i love u soooo much, u take my breath away





muahahahhahahah!!!
love,

Teal, the magical lute playing elf

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Re: Alone

Post by skaterGuy15 » Mon Dec 23, 2002 9:40 am

*runs after Teal like a psycho waving an axe*
I wish I were a spy.

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