This Is One Ive Started

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This Is One Ive Started

Post by Flowers For The Dead » Sun Jan 26, 2003 3:11 pm

if i die before i wake.

i pray for you for goodness sake.

all the pain you've caused me

wont go un avenged

when i die you'll see me forever.

you'll never get away

nothing you do or nothing youll say.

around every corner on every floor

ill be there knocking at your door.

I dare to let the moments drag past

without letting you know what you've instilled into me.

as the time passes reality rots and you see me.

soon madness will take the reigns

and drive you away

crashing you downward

when you think that you've forgotten and everythings at last.

ill be right beside you shatterning your glass.

you may never see me but i am always there

haunting you till death avenging my despair.

after whats seems a lifetime

you finally confess and die

a single tear runs down my cheeks but i refuse to cry.

murder haunts us forever and never stops to break.

murder takes a life away that wasnt your to take.
Fill up the bucket with whatever ya got.

Make sure it's somethin' that the bucket likes alot.



One day CUT FREE!!!!

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Post by Barbies are Evil » Sun Jan 26, 2003 3:14 pm

Yeah, defintely keep going, that's really good!
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I've been numb, I'm revived



Can't say I'm not alive



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Post by Flowers For The Dead » Sun Jan 26, 2003 3:23 pm

:" thank you. :D
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Post by lil_angel_lover » Sun Jan 26, 2003 3:44 pm

:D Plz keep writing it. I've got to read more. It's an excellent poem.
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Post by Flowers For The Dead » Sun Jan 26, 2003 4:47 pm

wow.... ive never gotten such possitive feedback before thank you guys.

:D
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Post by Britt » Sun Jan 26, 2003 7:02 pm

thats a killer awesome poem..i think it sounds really good...i really really like it


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Post by Flowers For The Dead » Sun Jan 26, 2003 7:35 pm

well before i finished it.(above is the finished version) all the way to acting_is_fun . saw the un-finished poem. but that above is the finished copy. i glad you like it.
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Post by forsaken_without_you » Sun Jan 26, 2003 7:38 pm

wow, thats great! i love it so much! :D
she said she cared...then why am I all alone..?





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Post by lil_angel_lover » Sun Jan 26, 2003 7:38 pm

Dude, great poem. I like it. I'm gonna rate it. Don't stop writing poems. :D
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Post by Mail Order » Sun Jan 26, 2003 7:55 pm

That was grrreeeeeaaaaatttt!**Sticks finger in the air like Tony the tiger from the corn flakes box**
ATTENTION: Due to finanical difficulties, the light at the end of the tunnel has been switched off.

"They turn the lights down low,

In shadows hiding from the world,

Only coming out when it gets cold.

The seas part when they hit the floor,

The voices carry on and out the door

And everything you touch turns into gold

Like the angel you are you laugh creating a lightness in my chest,

Your eyes they penetrate me,

(Never cease to amaze me)

That's when I got up and left" Like The Angel - Rise Against

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Post by Flowers For The Dead » Sun Jan 26, 2003 8:05 pm

hehehe thank you.
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Post by Britt » Mon Jan 27, 2003 1:38 am

haha..yes..your a great writer..and i like your screen name...


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Post by Flowers For The Dead » Mon Jan 27, 2003 9:57 am

thanks. ....... ive said thanks like 7 times.... thank all of you......... again :D
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