Do You Feel Me

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Do You Feel Me

Post by Britt » Mon Jan 27, 2003 1:45 am

I wish they all knew

The pain i feel

I wish they felt it

Then they'd feel how i do

They would know the feeling

Of not being loved

They would feel the hurt

They would never be above

They would feel so low

Just like I do

They would always want to hide

Not share their true feeling's

In fear of being denied

They would always just listen

Never speak

Afraid of criticism

They would take what was thrown at them

But never throw it back

They would just sit there and stare

Be taken in by the maddness

They would watch people go

They would watch people stay

They would watch them as they waster their life away

They would speak up, comeout, and be free

They would receive the love they wanted

The love they always need

They would feel better about themselves

They would be happy

Wear a mask always


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Re: Do You Feel Me

Post by Britt » Mon Jan 27, 2003 1:46 am

tell me what you think


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Re: Do You Feel Me

Post by Mail Order » Mon Jan 27, 2003 1:49 am

That was really good!!! I like that ALOT!
ATTENTION: Due to finanical difficulties, the light at the end of the tunnel has been switched off.

"They turn the lights down low,

In shadows hiding from the world,

Only coming out when it gets cold.

The seas part when they hit the floor,

The voices carry on and out the door

And everything you touch turns into gold

Like the angel you are you laugh creating a lightness in my chest,

Your eyes they penetrate me,

(Never cease to amaze me)

That's when I got up and left" Like The Angel - Rise Against

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Re: Do You Feel Me

Post by Britt » Mon Jan 27, 2003 2:08 am

thanx chick..the last line is my fav...wear a mask always..thats how i feel


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Re: Do You Feel Me

Post by chad » Mon Jan 27, 2003 2:10 am

Wow!! That's good. I like it. I know how you feel with the last line, I often feel that way too. :ph34r:

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Re: Do You Feel Me

Post by Britt » Mon Jan 27, 2003 2:58 am

thanx for the replies so far..i need to break 400 posts b4 i go to bed..i won't go until it happens..its already 1:00 am..i have school..


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Re: Do You Feel Me

Post by lil_angel_lover » Mon Jan 27, 2003 5:38 pm

Great poem don't stop writing them please. I want to read everybodies poems. They are so good.
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