My First Attempt
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- Havoc78
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Re: My First Attempt
thats good
She will never know that im the best she'll never have.-BOWLING FOR SOUP
do you really wanna be like them. do you really wanna be another trend. do you wanna be a part of the crowd.
cause i dont ever wanna be you dont ever wanna be just like you-Good Charlotte
do you really wanna be like them. do you really wanna be another trend. do you wanna be a part of the crowd.
cause i dont ever wanna be you dont ever wanna be just like you-Good Charlotte
- pmfman
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that was good, maybe you should makje your next one alitle bigger
"we have troubles all around us, but we are not defeated" - Corinthians
"only two things are infinate, the universe and stupidity" - Albert Einstein
"People standing on escalators are a testimony to human lazyness" - Christ Novolestic
"Wanting to be someone else is a waste of the person you are" - Kurt Cobain
"Just because your paraniod it dosnt mean there not after you" - Kurt Cobain
"Peddle the ass that god gave you, buy nitrous" - Dave Ghrol
"only two things are infinate, the universe and stupidity" - Albert Einstein
"People standing on escalators are a testimony to human lazyness" - Christ Novolestic
"Wanting to be someone else is a waste of the person you are" - Kurt Cobain
"Just because your paraniod it dosnt mean there not after you" - Kurt Cobain
"Peddle the ass that god gave you, buy nitrous" - Dave Ghrol
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Re: My First Attempt
and what a way to begin, that was great. keep it up.
Fill up the bucket with whatever ya got.
Make sure it's somethin' that the bucket likes alot.
One day CUT FREE!!!!
Make sure it's somethin' that the bucket likes alot.
One day CUT FREE!!!!
- Sky
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It is understandable... nop rhyme.... but not alot of detail. Lot of readers point of veiw and emotion are included in this poem! Dustin it is a GREAT poem and especially good if it is your first attempt at writing a poem... delicious lol
<span style=\'font-family:Times\'Something told the wild geese
It was tine to go
Through the fields lay golden
Something wispered- "SNOW"
Leaves were green and stirring
Berries,luster-glossed
But beneath the warm feathers
Something cautioned- "FROST"
All the sagging orchards
Steamed With amber spice
But each wild breast stiffened
At rembered ice
Something told the wild geese
It was time to fly-
Summer sun was on their wings
Winter in their cry
It was tine to go
Through the fields lay golden
Something wispered- "SNOW"
Leaves were green and stirring
Berries,luster-glossed
But beneath the warm feathers
Something cautioned- "FROST"
All the sagging orchards
Steamed With amber spice
But each wild breast stiffened
At rembered ice
Something told the wild geese
It was time to fly-
Summer sun was on their wings
Winter in their cry