The World Today (May be triggering)

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The World Today (May be triggering)

Post by njh88_07 » Wed Jun 11, 2008 1:18 am

"The world today"

Life

Everyone lives

but the decisions we make

don't always allow us to live

they just allow us to exist

we are who we are

no one can change us

if others had the ability to change who we are

we would not be us

but instead

we'd be someone that they'd want us to be

Conformity

you see everyone wants to be someone else

but do you ever see someone who just wants to remain themself?

Emphesis

So much pressure is put on young teens today

you hear of a lot of people who are starving to be thin

dying alone

because their obsession is beginning to win

Emotions

Suicide is a big factor in teen deaths

a broken home

or being an only child

who was adopted

but is bitter

from her past or his

Rape and molestation take a toll

and can only be erased by raising the blade

those who can't find an enough of an escape through

SI end it all

they can't think through the pain

to realize that they are choosing a permanent solution to a temporary problem

Abuse

is something onthe news almost every night

some get what they deserve

while others run free

because the victim was never believed

It's memories are haunting to those who can't seem to let go

even though they say they are over it

it's always there it still remains

Faking it

some don't want others to know or see the truth

they are happy on the outside

while slowly dying on the inside

sometimes it's easier

to lie to the world than to tell others how they feel

when they know that they won't understand

Drugs

They always say

that anger is a secondary emotion

when it comes to drugs

people don't die because they are angry

they die because they are addicted

Players

People play with others emotions

fuck with their heads

they get what they want

and drop them

while the other is left unsuspecting

and hurt to the point where they no longer trust others

Alcohol

Go out get wasted shit-faced and trashed

they drive and either get caught or wreck

or they make it home safely

go to bed go to sleep and never wake up

while others just don't give a fuck

and night after night they keep this shit up

Fitting in

is all about being accepted for what you do

not who you are

those who don't fit in

do everything they can to be accepted and noticed

smoking comes first

and then everything else follows

until they can't deal and fall away

from the world and lose themselves

others don't notice what is going on

until they all realize that they are gone

Day after day

this world spins around

while no one catches

all these things going on in the world today.
Our attitude towards life determines lifes attitude towards us.

-Earl Nighingale



I may have done some things that are wrong but hey who hasn't? I don't know anyone that is perfect. Do you?



People don't die from suicide they die from sadness.

-ANONYMOUS





That which nourishes me also destroys me.

ANGELINA JOLIE -So true for me. I believe it.

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Re: The World Today (May be triggering)

Post by njh88_07 » Mon Jul 14, 2008 6:49 pm

I also noticed in this poem I wrote a lot of you have read this one as well. If you could also reply to this one I would greatly again appreciate the input of other's and what they think of my writing.
Our attitude towards life determines lifes attitude towards us.

-Earl Nighingale



I may have done some things that are wrong but hey who hasn't? I don't know anyone that is perfect. Do you?



People don't die from suicide they die from sadness.

-ANONYMOUS





That which nourishes me also destroys me.

ANGELINA JOLIE -So true for me. I believe it.

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Re: The World Today (May be triggering)

Post by Ingenuity » Mon Jul 14, 2008 10:36 pm

ok, so lets see, when I'm commenting on something I never like to just say, "I liked it" or "that was nice" or "I hope you feel better" so if I can't really think of anything in particular to say, then I don't bother with some generic line, perhaps some others feel that way as well, or don't want to be critical or something.

so, this came off sort of like a public serivce announcment to me, not that it's a bad thing, but I could picture it on a cammerical or in a pamplet about living up to your own personnal "potential" (I hate that word), or something like that. Your pointing out a bunch of things that as far as I'm concerned are unconrollable. They are created by allowing people to itneract as naturally as possible. Your always going to be effected by things in your environment, thats natural, but we can't get eveyone to be NICE, we can't get anyone to be nice. Some people are going to kill themselves, some people are going to have eating disorders, some people are going to do drugs... That has to do with human nature. We will do what we decide to do, even if it's stupid, even if it's mean or harmful. We aren't very itnelligent creatures, we don't learn from our mistakes, and no matter how hard we try to convince ourselves that not being "happy" and "yourself" is wrong and something that should be fixed, it's just the way things are. In our minds we all have logical reasons for the things we do, we believe in them full heartedly, and only when we look around at others and listen to what people are telling us do we begin to question those things, and convince ourselves that they are wrong. the whole "being yourself" v.s. conformity thing, I just toss that out the window. I figure everyone of us is being ourselves no matter what we are doing. even if your trying to fit in by doing something, thats being youself becasue you chose to immitate beahavior to gaine acceptence. That's what your poem made me think about, the lives we have are "flawed", becasue they will never measure up to anyones idea of perfection, but they are what we have, and they aren't going to change, so we just have to accept the fact that life isn't fun, it's a miserable race for surivival.
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Re: The World Today (May be triggering)

Post by Barbies are Evil » Tue Jul 15, 2008 6:19 am

I think you have to choose between rhyming/unrhyming poems........you switched the flow of the poem a lot and the whole random lines that don't rhyme thing really threw me off.......just polish your writing off and you'll be great :)
TJ[10:13 PM]: no not really..... it's all so.... like wow..... screw steps, you took a fuckin jet pack and strapped it on yourself and rocketed your way forward (thats my big bro)







And I'm going to extremes



Tomorrow I will change



And today won't mean a thing



I'm a bitch, I'm a tease



I'm a goddess on my knees



When you hurt, when you suffer



I'm your angel undercover



I've been numb, I'm revived



Can't say I'm not alive



You know I wouldn't want it any other way



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Re: The World Today (May be triggering)

Post by njh88_07 » Tue Jul 15, 2008 7:45 pm

Thank you all for your input on my poetry it means a lot to me to get the thoughts of others of how I am doing when it comes to my writing.
Our attitude towards life determines lifes attitude towards us.

-Earl Nighingale



I may have done some things that are wrong but hey who hasn't? I don't know anyone that is perfect. Do you?



People don't die from suicide they die from sadness.

-ANONYMOUS





That which nourishes me also destroys me.

ANGELINA JOLIE -So true for me. I believe it.

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