"Hurt" (May be triggering)

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"Hurt" (May be triggering)

Post by njh88_07 » Wed Jun 11, 2008 1:31 am

"Hurt"

The tears have dried

behind my swollen eyes

No one sees just how my heart bleeds

The love of my life is nowhere near

I'm falling apart

for this is much to hard

in my mind your picture hides

I see no more of what I need

my life is all blind to me

the memories the dreams

they are all haunting

you took my heart and broke it

like a fragil glass vase falling onto the floor

Is that what "SHE" taught you

after all I gave I come out the "LOSER"

they think I'm the "SLUT"

Yeah Right!

Maybe they should look at the one

who's made me out of sight

This world's full of love

and this world's full of hate

But I have done nothing wrong

so why am I in this FUCKING cage

you have the key let me out

don't you hear me dying now

you don't even look my way

is that because you're afraid of what "SHE" will say

I haven't changed I'm still the same

oh, wait I forgot that my heart is starting to rot

In your dreams I haunt your mind

but during the day you don't notice

because you're too preoccupied

to notice what you've done to me

they all know but you just ignore

the knocking in your brain coming from the back door

you say "It's just weird for us to be friends"

and you did it for "HER"

you just want the memories of me to end.
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Re: "Hurt" (May be triggering)

Post by njh88_07 » Mon Jul 14, 2008 6:47 pm

I have noticed a lot of you have read this post. Yet no one replies. If at all possible could you please let me know what you think? I like other's inputs on what I write.
Our attitude towards life determines lifes attitude towards us.

-Earl Nighingale



I may have done some things that are wrong but hey who hasn't? I don't know anyone that is perfect. Do you?



People don't die from suicide they die from sadness.

-ANONYMOUS





That which nourishes me also destroys me.

ANGELINA JOLIE -So true for me. I believe it.

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Re: "Hurt" (May be triggering)

Post by Ingenuity » Mon Jul 14, 2008 10:20 pm

welp, it seems personal to me, romance/broken hearts aren't really to my liking, but if they were I supose I'd like it a lot more. I like some of the more general lines, but once you start talking about "her" it seems like your speaking of a very specific person and a very specific incident, and it's not really a "her" that a reader can personnally imagine. sounds a bit resentful, more than a bit really. but personal poetry is usually more theraputic than it is anything else, so it doesn't matter if I don't know about "her" or understand exactly.
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